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[绿意盎然] 【是我让妻子堕入深渊】26-30

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我觉得色文得是五分铺垫五分肉戏，起码也得四分铺垫。这样才能条理清晰，逻辑顺畅。前因后果交待的清清楚楚，这样代入感才强，比较引人入胜。例如此文细节部分和心理、语言描写就非常到位，让人非常期待主角妻子被推倒的那一刻。等到高潮那部分来的时候应该非常带劲。
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